Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
[x]

deviantART

 


When I am lonely, these words I hear
They whisper to me, please don't fear
You are not alone, I'm always here

They echo loudly, in this quiet room
Moving along, with a furtive tune
Secretly hoping, they will come true soon

As I look about, to see from where they came
Seeing not a thing, I feel nothing but shame
Is this someone, trying to play a sick game

Seeing something fall, and crashing onto the floor
The wind picking up, blowing open the door  
The sky opening up, rain beginning to pour

Someone standing in the night, I know it is not right
Wanting to run to them, but that urge i must fight
I 'm quickly awakened, when someone turns on the light
:iconshinigaminightwalker:

Author's Comments

i did this poem with five three line stanza. the syllables for each stanza go (9,8,9) (10,9,10) (11,10,11) (12,11,12) (13,12,13). poetry isnt my strong point and i just structured it how i wanted to ^^;
anyways, i hope you like it :D

i also have this same poem with a different ending [link] called 'never alone' i personally like that one better ^^

(c) shinigaminightwalker
please do not use without my permission

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconshinigaminightwalker:
:bow: thanks

--
~=l< )

I'm not a social butterfly. I'm a solitary moth
--
Me: I have a tea bag on my nose
Gin: I got a tousen on my toes
Me: Gin's not in my hair
Gin: I'm in your underwear
Me: ..wait. you are? where?
Gin: :pointandlaugh: made you look
:iconk11paws:
Love This!!!
You are quite the poet.

--
- Kat

In The Land Of The Blind, The One Eyed Man Is King....
:iconshinigaminightwalker:
:w00t: thank you. i am happy that you think so.

my favorite poem i have written so far is 'melody of despair' [link] and 'never alone' [link]
i left links incase you would like to check them out ^^

--
~=l< )

I'm not a social butterfly. I'm a solitary moth
--
Me: I have a tea bag on my nose
Gin: I got a tousen on my toes
Me: Gin's not in my hair
Gin: I'm in your underwear
Me: ..wait. you are? where?
Gin: :pointandlaugh: made you look
:iconloudest-silence1:
Really good! I haven't written poetry since like my junior year in high school, but I like this alot!

--
どのように地獄を閉めるの良い背の高いガラスを
:iconshinigaminightwalker:
:icongwompplz: thanks. i am happy you my poem. i think this is the best poem i have ever done.....it's the longest atleast ^^

--
~=l< )

I'm not a social butterfly. I'm a solitary moth
--
Me: I have a tea bag on my nose
Gin: I got a tousen on my toes
Me: Gin's not in my hair
Gin: I'm in your underwear
Me: ..wait. you are? where?
Gin: :pointandlaugh: made you look
:iconkonamii:
i like it

--
Bright Eyes
burning like fire
Bright Eyes
how could you close and fail?
How could a light that burns so brightly suddenly burn so pale?
Bright Eyes
:iconshinigaminightwalker:
thanks ^^

--
~=l< )

I'm not a social butterfly. I'm a solitary moth
--
Me: I have a tea bag on my nose
Gin: I got a tousen on my toes
Me: Gin's not in my hair
Gin: I'm in your underwear
Me: ..wait. you are? where?
Gin: :pointandlaugh: made you look
:iconchibibookworm221:
lol. ya i guess that could be kinda scary. but i love it. great job shunshun. sorry i couldnt help more. im not good at that stuffs. i mean i suck at writing stories so i really suck at poetry lol.

--
"Silence is the ultimate weapon of power; it is also one of the hardest arguments to dispute."
--------
"got a taste for religion? lick a monk." :lick:
--------
check out ma :gallery: :D [link] peaz and tank ooz ^w^

Found in these Groups:

Details

October 28, 2009
899 bytes

Statistics

17
17 [who?]
188 (0 today)
1 (0 today)

Share

Link
Thumb

Site Map